- The Writers Voice -

[Linda]

Excellent free verse...the spaces were used perfectly...this is a poem worth saving....rereading...then rereading again...just as I was caught up in the "meandering banalities...of a semi-bored man", intrigued "beyond a shadow of a doubt"...you left me smiling at the "unattended...foolishness"....

Good job, Fenn! I truly hope to read more of your work.

Linda

PS...I think I would have replaced "a" with "the" in "beyond a shadow of a doubt"...simply because there is already an "a" in that line...but, trust me, my thoughts in no way change my appreciation of this excellent free verse.
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Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
-- Dylan Thomas