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Traitor by Stephen Collicoat

 
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Heidi
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PostPosted: Mon Feb 22, 2010 1:50 pm    Post subject: Traitor by Stephen Collicoat Reply with quote

I just read this and the first word that comes to mind is wow. I mean that in a good way. I got so into the story of Nicky and Andrew I completely forgot that I was reading about his obituary and not something else. I'm not sure the ending fits exactly. I liked the idea but I would suggest something a bit shorter. The story of Andrew works, but something about the transition didn't quite work for me. As for the good? Well that was everything else. The characters you created were interesting and I felt like they were real people. The setting was good, kind of confusing since they moved around so much (the story dictates this so it's not an issue.) The underlying tension of the whole piece was great too.

It was refreshing to read about a homosexual couple instead of straight one. Most of the stories on here deal with that, which is fine but it gets old after while. Thanks for an interesting read Stephen.
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PostPosted: Tue Mar 02, 2010 3:44 am    Post subject: Traitor Reply with quote

Just read this and I honestly thought it was one of the best things i'd read in a long while. Like Heidi, i thought it was good to be able to read about a homosexual couple for a change.
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