Joined: 14 Jan 2004
|Posted: Sat Jul 06, 2013 11:10 am Post subject: A Secret Plan by Devil's Delight
I read your poem several times, and found it very dark, as most of your poetry seems to be; however, very interesting also. It was a little confusing trying to separate the narrator from the sociopath, italics may help do this, but the confusion may be part of your design. The poem certainly shows the obsessive compulsive nature of a sociopath as well as the intense illusion they can create. This one had "A secret plan inside his head" that drove him. Sociopaths are also poetic in that they are masters of using language to manipulate....if it were my poem, I might try to add some manipulative dialog. But that may be my own obsessive compulsive nature.
Do not go gentle into that good night.
Rage, rage against the dying of the light.
-- Dylan Thomas