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PostPosted: Wed Nov 10, 2004 9:52 am    Post subject: The Italian Lesson - Harry Buschman Reply with quote

Harry, you did it again! I think you should be given an award for the best opening sentences on this forum!

You wrote:

Leo was forced to admit to himself that he was undergoing erotic distress at the most inconvenient and unexplainable times.

Tell me one person who would not read further. And, while I have not completed the story, I've printed it out and I'm waiting anxiously for everyone to leave my desk. I do enjoy reading your excellent work!

Thanks!
Linda

PS, My lab tech was using my telephone while I read the first part. I heard him laughing, looked up and saw him reading also. Wink
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 10, 2004 2:00 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Harry! I can't speak Italian, so I don't know what she told Leo. Please tell me there is another chapter to this story! Crying or Very sad
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PostPosted: Wed Nov 10, 2004 3:43 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

My knowledge of Italian is pretty much limited to two months in Milan and two weeks in Venice. I had the idea that the girl’s remark could be inferred from Leo’s desperate condition.

I was careful not to describe Leo in any detail, hoping that the action of the story would reveal it. He was a full blown nerd, a nebbish, a schlemiel, and the girl’s natural question was “When was the last time you made love to a woman?”
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 11, 2004 8:00 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Harry wrote:
My knowledge of Italian is pretty much limited to two months in Milan and two weeks in Venice. I had the idea that the girl’s remark could be inferred from Leo’s desperate condition.

I was careful not to describe Leo in any detail, hoping that the action of the story would reveal it. He was a full blown nerd, a nebbish, a schlemiel, and the girl’s natural question was “When was the last time you made love to a woman?”


But, Harry. What happens to Leo? Crying or Very sad
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 11, 2004 8:05 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Linda wrote:
Harry wrote:
My knowledge of Italian is pretty much limited to two months in Milan and two weeks in Venice. I had the idea that the girl’s remark could be inferred from Leo’s desperate condition.

I was careful not to describe Leo in any detail, hoping that the action of the story would reveal it. He was a full blown nerd, a nebbish, a schlemiel, and the girl’s natural question was “When was the last time you made love to a woman?”


But, Harry. What happens to Leo? Crying or Very sad


I mean, couldn't he go to a Mexican Restaurant in the next chapter and maybe learn a little Spanish? Laughing

I don't want to think of him staying that way. I want a happy ending. Crying or Very sad
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PostPosted: Thu Nov 11, 2004 9:17 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I don't like endings, Linda, that's why I enjoy short stories. In my humble opinion a short story is nothing more than a snapshot - living for just a moment in time. It has no beginning and no end. Endings are for novelists.

The prognosis for Leo is bleak, he could have a dozen short stories written about him. Like Don Quixote - none of them would have beginnings or endings.

Sure, he could go to a Spanish restaurant, or a German one -- maybe even French. What would be the purpose? He is doomed - a schlemiel will always be a schlemiel.
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