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Foolishness by Donnelly Fenn

 
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Linda
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PostPosted: Fri Apr 10, 2009 7:38 pm    Post subject: Foolishness by Donnelly Fenn Reply with quote

Excellent free verse...the spaces were used perfectly...this is a poem worth saving....rereading...then rereading again...just as I was caught up in the "meandering banalities...of a semi-bored man", intrigued "beyond a shadow of a doubt"...you left me smiling at the "unattended...foolishness"....

Good job, Fenn! I truly hope to read more of your work.

Linda

PS...I think I would have replaced "a" with "the" in "beyond a shadow of a doubt"...simply because there is already an "a" in that line...but, trust me, my thoughts in no way change my appreciation of this excellent free verse.
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