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PostPosted: Mon Jun 14, 2010 10:21 am    Post subject: Part 5 - Cara Walker Reply with quote

You got a great deal of drama into this segment, Cara. A needle sharp focus into Kay's emotional state of mind. Her escape into herself ... well it indicates her instability I suppose, her emotional fragility too. Very hard to put these feelings into ordinary prose ... you almost have to stand back from it and write it from the outside in and hope the reader supplies some of the drama himself.
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PostPosted: Fri Jun 18, 2010 2:47 am    Post subject: Thanks Reply with quote

Thanks a load for your comments. I've actually already written Part 6 too Smile , I just haven't typed it up yet. I don't want to spoil anything but, with apologies to whoever sang the song... 'Love is in the air....'
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PostPosted: Thu Dec 02, 2010 1:09 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Cara,

I read parts 1-5 all at once, and I'm glad I was able to do that. It allows for the continuity to remain unbroken, as well as the tension. I'm wondering what will happen next. Will Rick and Katie be able to get together, or will he be unable to defeat his illness leaving Katie and Sam to move on without him. There is a lot of passion in this...so strong that it tugs at the heart. Nice job with this, and I'm glad to hear there's a part 6.

Keep up the good work and God bless,
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PostPosted: Fri Dec 03, 2010 3:21 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Part 6 will be sent asap, have written it on paper so will have to type it up...
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