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PostPosted: Sun Jan 23, 2011 10:53 am    Post subject: 500 X 183 Look Reply with quote


Hi all,

I know it's been a while since I've posted a prompt. I apologize. This one comes to us from our own Harry. (Thanks, Harry.). I look forward to seeing what you come up with.

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PostPosted: Tue Jan 25, 2011 11:08 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Meanwhile Back On Pandora

Harry Buschman


"Herman's hardly said a word since we got the flat screen TV. He just sits there with his 3-D eyeglasses and his earphones. Wish we never got the thing. The old set was good enough for me末like some more tea, Alice?" Martha picked up the teapot and refilled Alice's cup.

"Thanks Martha." Alice turned and looked quickly over to the sofa in the corner. Herman sat in the middle of it with his feet up on the coffee table in front of him. Between his feet was a bowl of Cheese Doodles. "You think he knows we're here," she asked?

"Oh, he knows all right. Just keep your eye on the Cheese Doodles, little by little the level in the bowl goes down ... I don't know how he does it, you never see him take any but sooner or later I have to fill the bowl again."

"What's he watching" Alice asked?

"It's hard to tell without looking through those silly glasses, and when he wears the earphones only he can hear." She squints at the screen hanging on the wall across the room. "I think I see green men flying on the backs of birds."

"Well," Alice reasoned. "at least you know where he is. Take my Bert, for instance, I never know what he's up to."

"It's a mixed blessing, Alice末I always know where Herman is. As soon he comes home from work he says, 'Hi Martha' and he puts on those glasses, plugs in his earphones and says, 'Call me when dinner's ready'. He gobbles it down and he's back in here again." She sighs deeply, "... it's like he's on his second honeymoon with a television set."

Both women seemed to be lost in reverie, their teacups held at "present arms" position and their eyes far away.

Suddenly every light in the room went out!

Quick witted Martha told everyone to stay where they were. "I know where the candles are," she announced ... dear me, we haven't had a power outage in years."

There was a sound from the sofa in the corner末not quite human末more wolf-like than human. When Martha got a candle lit, both women realized Herman had risen with his life supporting earphones and 3-D glasses dangling uselessly in his hand. "What the hell ..." he started. "Martha! What have you done? I was on Pandora with the blue people, you realize that? I have to get back to Pandora!"

"It's a black-out, Herman. A black-out. The power will be back soon I'm sure. Have some Cheese Doodles末oh末Alice is here. Say hello to Alice."

Herman stared dazedly across the room at Alice. 鄭re you from Pandora? I am a Pandoran末an evil spirit has come over us. I must get back! Martha, turn on the lights. Bring more Cheese Doodles. Lights! Lights! We must have light. He sank back on the sofa again and held up the empty bowl. 鼎heese Doodles are the source of our power, he glanced from Alice to Martha and plugged in his earphones and adjusted his 3-D glasses.

Martha took the empty bowl from Herman and went back to the kitchen by candlelight. Herman shouted after her ... 展e池e getting battery back-up, Martha, the future of Pandora is at stake.
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PostPosted: Fri Feb 04, 2011 10:32 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Wow, Harry, could this be prophecy for those who find virtual reality more riveting and real that life itself? This is an entertaining piece with well-defined characters that I care about, but the underlying message is actually a bit chilling. We need to unplug and live, before we forget how to do it. Well done, my friend. It was, as always, a pleasure.

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PostPosted: Fri Feb 04, 2011 10:36 am    Post subject: Perspectives (WC 500) Reply with quote

Hi everyone,

I hope you're all doing well.

Ok, I know I'm late, but here it is, hot off the keyboard. Freewrite. Wink Thanks for taking a look.

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ゥ Marlicia Fernandez 2-4-11 (WC 500)



Krystal squinted as her eyes adjusted to the brightness of their surroundings. 展hat are we supposed to be looking for?

泥on稚 worry; we値l know when we see it. Foster surveyed the waking town and its tiny square. 釘ut I can稚 believe anything of importance hides here.

展hy not? What better place to hide something important than somewhere no one thinks about. She adjusted her cloak, but Foster stopped her from pulling her hood over her head. She glared at him. 的 don稚 like this. It痴 too open. People will seeand remember us.

He grinned. 徹nly if you make yourself noteworthy. We池e at the edge of a desert. Even as early as it is, it痴 hot as blazes. The expression faded. 典his is the last source of water for travelers before Kilmaron Oasis fifty miles across the sands, so they池e used to newcomers, but hunkering into your cloak will attract unwanted attention.

She grimaced and shook free from his hold. 擢ine, but I feel half-dressed without it.

典ake it off anyway. We値l leave it somewhere safe. Foster held out his hand. A thin, gauzy cloth, about the size of a large shawl dangled from his fingers. 添ou can wear this. It will hide your features, especially your hair, and help you blend in.

Krystal stared at the fabric fluttering in the slight breeze. 展here did you? She glanced over her shoulder at the busy vendors and laughed. 典hey didn稚 even have the chance to unpack did they?

哲ope. Now let痴 have it, Krys.

徹k, ok Krystal unhooked the clasp and shrugged out of the cloak. She stroked the rough cloth. 的t痴 a fair trade, but I want this back when we池e finished. We致e been through a lot together.

He handed her the filmy shawl and stuffed the cloak in the bottom of his pack. 添ou値l get it. And keep that one too. You know how to wear it?

She rolled her eyes and swung the cloth around. It settled on her head and draped over her shoulders. A few deft movements adjusted the material so one end crossed the front of her body to swing loosely down her back and the other hung in front of her after crossing her shoulder from the back.

Foster whistled low. 添ou池e full of surprises.

哲ot really, just observant. Besides, I like to keep you guessing. Krystal raised her arms experimentally beneath the swaddling. 的t痴 roomier than it looks. Pretty too. You池e right. I think I will keep it.

的 try to please. Foster glanced at the clear sky. 哲ow, if you池e ready, we need to get started.

She blinked. 敵et started with what? You still haven稚 told me why we池e here. Or why we池e working in daylight.

的 have to trust Raston; you池e going to have to trust me.

迭aston? He痴 the one who hired us? Are you crazy?

鉄hhh. Foster gripped her elbow and escorted her into the square. 展e need the coin and when the job痴 done, we値l turn the traitor in.

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PostPosted: Fri Feb 04, 2011 12:26 pm    Post subject: Reply with quote

Interesting duet starring two fish out of water looking for a coin with which they can turn in Raston. Good beginning, Marlicia. I think I've spent some time at the Kilmaron Oasis ... I've forgotten what the occasion was, but I do remember running into Rudolf Valentino and Vilma Banky.
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PostPosted: Fri Feb 04, 2011 3:37 pm    Post subject: 500 word prompt Reply with quote

Here's my take on the prompt. It's just an idea I had so it may not be the best.

Freewrite
2/4/11
Heidi Yang

Wendy stared out the window, "So much for going out today." she mumbled.
"Did you say something dear?" David replied.
"Nothing," Wendy said.
"Okay then." David shrugged and went back to washing the dishes. Wendy sighed as she watched the raining pelting the windows. She glanced around their modest house. The couch looked comfortable, a few blankets lay across it. She frowned as she noticed how dingy the kitchen floor was. It's original white hue was now brown with mud. David turned off the faucet and wiped his hands on a red dish towel. "What do you want to do today?" he asked.
"I'm not sure."
"I know you wanted to go to the observatory today, maybe tomorrow?"
"This weather does limit our options, doesn't it?"
"We could go see a movie, or maybe a board game?" David said as he sat down across from Wendy at the small wooden table.
"A board game? I haven't done that since I was a kid." Wendy mused. "Do we even have any?"
"I don't know, if we did they would be in the basement. Want me to take a look?"
"No, why don't we watch a movie here?"
"Okay, I'll let you pick." David replied with a smile. She smiled back as she walked over to an oak cabinet with glass doors. She glanced over some of the titles pausing on one about aliens. As she pulled out the DVD another box came flying out and landed on the carpet. "What's this?" Wendy asked as she picked up the cover. It was an old VHS box with a picture of old-fashioned binoculars on the front. The Beach the title read along with a picture of a beach and a wooden railing. "Do you remember the time we saw all those pelicans?" Wendy asked with a laugh.
"I sure do." David replied his brown eyes softened. "You were so surprised."
"Yes, I mean it's not like we were feeding them or anything." Wendy said. "It was almost like magic, one minute I'm scanning the ocean for any wildlife and suddenly there's fifty pelicans on the shore!"
"It was strange how calm they were." David said running a hand through his blond hair. "What made you think of that anyway?"
"Oh this old movie fell out of the cabinet." Wendy said handing him the box.
"Huh, can't say I remember this one." David said handing it back to her.
"Me either." Wendy replied flipping the box over. "Sounds like a chick flick though and not a very good one either."
"Guess that one is out." David said laughing.
"Yeah, want to watch Pandora? It's got aliens in it."
"Sure I'm always up for a bit of escapism."
"Okay I'll let you put it in." Wendy said as she settled in on the couch.
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PostPosted: Sat Feb 05, 2011 5:30 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

I have to say Wendy's got herself one hell of a model husband! Maybe Wendy wears the pants? Anyway, the old tape gave these two a lift末me, too, Heidi
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PostPosted: Sat Feb 12, 2011 8:10 am    Post subject: Reply with quote

Nice take on the prompt, Heidi. Very realistic and sweet. Wendy certainly has David trained. Of course love makes one want to do for the loved one. I wonder what they would have learned had they watched the 'chick flick'. Where did it come from anyway? Maybe a forgotten rental? Love how the desire to watch escapism in the form of aliens pops up a couple of times, even closing the piece. Maybe there is a deeper meaning in this than first meets the eye? Well done! And it's good to see you posting again.

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PostPosted: Sat Feb 12, 2011 4:16 pm    Post subject: Thanks Reply with quote

Thanks for the comments guys. I thoroughly enjoyed reading your pieces as well. Harry's was very original I would not have thought of that!
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