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PostPosted: Thu Jun 19, 2014 1:01 pm    Post subject: Cara Reply with quote

Worth moving on with t his, Cara. You might consider the present tense you’re in and stay there, those sneaky past tenses “I’d” and “they’d have been.” The story is strong, it has tension… don’t vacillate.
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