Joined: 15 Jan 2004
Location: New York
|Posted: Tue Nov 23, 2004 12:47 pm Post subject: 5 New Short Stories - Daniel W. Kneip
|They still haven’t lost their charm. Aesop would have loved them. I’d have to say I enjoyed the endings in the first group somewhat better than these - they seemed fresher.
One thing I might suggest is not try too hard for cuteness, ie”
“most heavenly meal”
“the old fellow responded in a wonderful little way.”
It seems to me these little digressions can wear thin.
We are all apprentices in a craft where no one ever becomes a master.